I think my conclusion sucks, how should I correct it?
Photojournalism is a career I am aiming to pursue. I would like to work at either a famous magazine or work solo and travel to different locations. I was first interested in 7th grade when I figured out that I wanted to write when I grew up. Later, I started to ponder journalism. Eventually I became more interested in photography; my cousin let me borrow an old film camera, and I began to use my family’s Nikon. Being a photojournalist would require creativity, open-mindedness, and honesty. I decided that I could merge both into one, photojournalism.
To be a photojournalist, requires having an artistic vision and the ability to communicate effectively with others. “Photojournalists may be self-trained or attend college for proper training,” from the (National Press Photographers Association). An associate, bachelors or masters degree in digital photography, journalism, mass communication and visual communication are very helpful. Because of the increasing departure of newspapers and magazine, finding a decent job can be difficult. The Bureau of Labor Statistics reported that “there are many more Photojournalists than jobs available”. To become ready for this career I should create an impressive portfolio of my absolute best work while in college.
In conclusion, I decided in a career in photojournalism because of my interest in photography and journalism. If I could become a great photojournalist, I would love to visit places such as Italy, Canada, New Zealand, or Japan.
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#1 by Bethany and Kaydee on February 16, 2012 - 6:39 am
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Give the last sentance an ending like “That’s why I…”
You’ll get an A if you do an ending >:D
#2 by Pedro on February 16, 2012 - 7:28 am
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1) “I was first interested in 7th grade when I figured out that I wanted to write when I grew up”
so your interested in 7th grade or jornalism?
change to “I was first interested in jornalism during 7th grade when I figured out that I wanted to write when I grew up”
2)” Eventually I became more interested in photography”
overtime instead of eventually
3)”I began to use my family’s Nikon.”
what is a Nikon? never heard of it before.
i assume it is a camera so change to
“I began to use my family’s Nikon Camera.”
4) ‘To be a photojournalist, requires having an ”
change to ” Being a photojournalist, requires..
5)” “there are many more Photojournalists than jobs available”.”
compared to what?
6) ” If I could become a great photojournalist, I would love to visit places such as Italy, Canada, New Zealand, or Japan.”
add why you would.
add a conclusion
sorry im very picky